Alfie’s writing inspired by ‘Touching the Void’

Swirling round and round the rough, misty wind was all I could see from down below. The white snow came flying down like little jets who were crash landing. I hoped I wouldn’t have the same ending. I tried to tell myself not to panic. But nerves kept on shutting the door. I felt so forlorn. The silence echoed all around me. I was as useless as a weight. The pain in my leg was so irritating, I didn’t think I could survive another day in this climate – my lip stung so badly  and I had frostbite. The wind was lethal – I felt like it wanted to knock me down. I missed my family but when I thought about them I only thought of the good times but this wasn’t one of them. Simon needs to hurry up and say something.

The next moments of my life I remember seeing nothing but gusts of wind and no Simon. I suddenly felt a pain in my back and I must of hit an ice cave. I opened my eyes and heard my heart. I was still alive. I got up then it hit me like a bullet the pain in my leg was still there. I got on my hands and chest for miles all I could see was nothing but the thick beautiful snow and felt the wind whipping at my eyelids.

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One response to “Alfie’s writing inspired by ‘Touching the Void’

  1. Great discriptive writing Alfie! I like the way you discribed the snow ‘ The white snow came flying down like little jets who were crash landing’. You used some really good words. 🙂

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